托福高分写作应避免的七类错误

兔斯基

托福考试的作文一直让不少考生十分挠头。从确定主题、理清思路，到划好层次、遣词造句，环环相扣缺一不可，因此作文永远不是一项小工程!

　　虽说ETS在评判托福作文时采用的是综合评分的方式，即以作文的整体水平判分，而不纠结于小细节。但有些同学往往会在语言方面疏漏多多，问题明显到影响了考官整体评断的程度，那即便你的思路和论证属于一流，最多也只能得个二流分数，岂不可惜!

　　下面，我们就来谈一谈同学们在托福写作中最容易犯的语言错误。大家可以对号入座，看看自己是不是也犯过类似的错误呢?

　　1. 用词不当

　　原：The absence of groupwork is a disaster for teenagers in modern society。

　　改：The absence of teamwork is a disaster for teenagers in modern society。

　　评：groupwork是“分组”或者“小组集体任务”的意思。这位同学原本想说teamwork“团队合作”，却用了一个看起来很像，但实际完全不同的词，表达出来的意思就风马牛不相及了。

　　原：You will be dangerous if you keep moving without a clear view of the whole picture。

　　改：You will be in danger if you keep moving without a clear view of the whole picture。

　　评：dangerous表示所修饰的对象是“带来危险的，有危险性的”，而be in danger才是“身处险境”的意思。到底谁才是威胁呢?

　　原：Firstly, the job, providing the opportunity for students to utilize what they learned inclass, might effect their further development。

　　改：Firstly, the job, providing the opportunity for students to utilize what they learned inclass, might affect their further development。

　　评：模样长得像，意思可不同了。这里想用动词affect表示“影响”，却误写为名词effect“效果”，一字千里啊!

　　2. 搭配错误

　　原：Nowadays, people are crazy pursuing to be excellent。

　　改：Nowadays, people are crazy about excellence。

　　评：这位同学显然记错了be crazy about sth. 这个用法，写出来的句子自然会出问题啦。

　　原：Besides, public speech can effectively increase your communication skills, whichfacilitate your salesman career。

　　改：Besides, public speech can effectively improve your communication skills, whichfacilitate your salesman career。

　　评：此处是一个明显的动宾搭配错误。“提高……技巧”应该是improve the skills，而不是increase theskills。

　　3.词性错位

　　原：I will forget my sad and pressure from the work and the study。

　　改：I will forget my sadness and pressure from work and study。

　　评：sad是形容词，而这里明显需要一个名词，应该是sadness。

　　原：Although making money is a priority for most people, spending time with the family isequal significant。

　　改：…, spending time with the family is equally significant。

　　评：形容词significant前需要用副词来修饰，所以equal应该改成equally。

　　4. 时态混乱

　　原：Although I have no work experience when I was a teenager, I always dreamed abouthaving a job。

　　改：Although I had no work experience when I was a teenager, I always dreamed abouthaving a job。

　　评：过去时的句子中冒出了现在时，同学你太粗心了，要仔细检查哦~

　　原：I would explain my view in the following paragraphs。

　　改：I’d like to explain… / I will explain…

　　评：可能是两种说法记混了吧，结果把时态搞错了……

　　5. 主谓不一致

　　原：The way we deal with the environmental problems are crucial to the prosperity ofhuman-being。

　　改：The way we deal with the environmental problems is crucial to the prosperity ofhuman-being。

　　评：谓语之前有两个名词时，主谓搭配的问题就常常出现了。这里真正的主语应该是单数名词the way，所以与之搭配的谓语也应该是单数的is。

　　6. 重复累赘

原：From my point of view, I think this argument is quite limited since many other wayscan also help learning a foreign country。

　　改：From my point of view, this argument is quite limited since many other ways can alsohelp us learn a foreign country。

　　评：from my point of view和I think重复啦，保留一个就好。当然这里建议留下更“高级”的from mypoint of view。

　　原：There are the majority of people who deem that they like to spend money on thingswhich can bring them long memory。

　　改：Majority of the people like to spend money on things that can be memorized for long。

　　评：中文句式说的“有很多人……”，但别一看到“有”就非要用there be句型不可哦，直接摆出主谓宾就行了。

　　“things that can be memorized for long”，被动语态明显更地道~

　　7. 中式英语

　　原：Thus, one is easier to draw bosses’ attention and gain appreciation。

　　改：Thus, it’s easier for you to draw bosses’ attention and gain appreciation。

　　评：中文习惯说“人们可以更容易地吸引老板的注意力”，而英语则习惯说“It’s easier for sb. to…”同学们要注意中英表述习惯的区别哦!